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WHEN THE WIND DIES
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Her name,
carried by the evening breeze
Swept past the cherry tree
and danced around the dark vacant walls of the old Hanson place.
I could hear it still as it lunged into the canyon below,
And it echoed in my ears like a lost love.
From the darkest corner of my mind
And the brightest spot in my heart
Memories came crashing around me.
I closed my eyes which only served to breathe new life into every scene.
Under the yellowed glow of a city street light,
I stood and I waited.
I whispered, "don't go" and flung my arms wide as though I could capture her name in the wind.
Garbage drifted past as I gazed
At a man walking his little dog.
He didn't look at me. Was I really there?
Maybe I was just a dying name in the wind.
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This is beautiful and just an amazing concept of thinking about a lost love. Very creative.
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He didn't look at me. Was I really there? Maybe I was just a dying name in the wind
So beautiful! I think this is my favorite part.-
That's cool :)! Thank you thank you
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Hi Ceara, Thank you! I was trying to imagine what it would feel like to be standing there so alone that not even a passerby noticed you.... that's what I came up with lol
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Very creative! You really painted a picture in my mind. Thanks for sharing!
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I got all confused on who I have responded to, so I'm saying thank-you again. Well maybe again. Did I say it before? lol.
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Memories came crashing around me. I closed my eyes which only served to breathe new life into every scene.
Love this part! Beautiful poem! Thanks for sharing!-
Thanks Miranda, that's cool. I was thinking about how when I try not to think about something I will close my eyes, but a lot of times that just makes it worse lol
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That feeling of loneliness and sorrow when you're not even standing alone. Do we exist if we remain unnoticed?
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Hi Kiersten, very cool spelling of your name. And yep you hit it right on! Thank you :)
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Hey David thank you. I'm glad you liked it and it's cool you let me know.